Here is a draft of the blurb for my upcoming book, Pride and Proposals. It’s amazing how hard these things are to write given how short they are! I welcome any feedback about it. Too much information about the plot? Not enough? Just right? Thanks for your help!
What would happen if Mr. Darcy proposed…too late?
Everyone comes to a crossroads, a defining moment that changes the rest of one’s life. In Jane Austen’s Pride and Prejudice, Mr. Darcy has fallen devastatingly, irrevocably in love with Elizabeth Bennet. He visits Hunsford Parsonage intending to propose. But when he arrives…Darcy discovers that Elizabeth has just accepted a proposal from Darcy’s cousin Colonel Fitzwilliam.
Darcy leaves England rather than watch the love of his life and his best friend prepare for a lifetime together. But he cannot stay away forever. He returns, determined to be the friend Elizabeth needs and vowing never to speak of what is in his heart.
Will Darcy find his happily ever after?
Good blurb! I liked the first part. I stumbled a little on the second part (“Darcy leaves England…”). My initial reaction was to start thinking, where did he go? How long was he gone? Travel takes time, if he’s gone too long they’ll be married before he gets back . . . etc. So, this part of the blurb made me think of lots of things and worry about how they would be resolved.
I don’t know if this is the reaction you want, but that is how I reacted to the blurb. Hope this helps!
Hi Jennie, Thanks for the feedback. It’s very helpful! I’m glad you like the first part since that’s the really important information. The second has really given me trouble and other people expressed some confusion about it. So I think I need to go back to the drawing board. If only I could just write the books without worrying about the blurbs :).
Would it work to just focus on his intent to be the friend she needs and to not speak of his feelings without going into anything about him leaving? Maybe focusing on his dilemma without saying how he deals with it (leaving England)? Best of luck!